Standing
Firm
When times were dark and lonely
Your undying love kept me sane
Faith that you'll do the work
Through prayer in your will remained
You gently kept me in your hand
Lifting me up so I firm can stand
Though mountains tried to break me down
I looked beyond at the waiting crown
My eyes they are focused on you
Your spirit lifts me each day anew
Many times he has faltered and failed
Through God’s mercy love has prevailed
Even when our hearts seem not able to mend
Christ that void fills again my friend
Many times we question as to the path life presents
Seems more problems than joy it brings
God is moulding me with each passing day
To complete the tasks he will send my way
I thank you Lord that I now know
Through joy & sorrow in you I grow
Keep me strong to complete the tasks
You have set aside help me in the race to last
Striving to walk with you obedient way
To be with you in heaven some day
Carmen Beeming
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Erna |
The sentiment is sincere, and it
is good to be reminded that others share the same feelings. As poetry – here and
there the rhyme is “forced”, making the rhythm or meaning a bit unclear. Some examples: Faith that you'll do the work It’s really hard to understand
what that second line means! And You gently kept me in your hand Here’s a suggestion You gently kept me in your hand Both the rhythm and the grammar of
the last line are better. It’s a good idea to put a poem
away for a while after you’ve written it, and then look at it again with
fresh eyes. |
2006.12.15 |